My favourite piece of technology is my laptop Is the only thing that I really need.
My father gave it to me one month after I entered to the university and I use it every day, many hours per day because it's really necessary for me, for to do all of my works and also for to relax in my times of leisure when I use the Msn Messenger program, visit Facebook and other websites of my interest.
Everyday after I arrive to my house I turn off the computer and first chek mi e- mail and just after that I can do my works and the other things .
I 'm sure that we can live without this kinds of things although a laptop or other type of computers are very important tools for almost all type of works.
Today we can't imagine a world working without this, but that is because now we are absolutely dependent of this things for to work and for some people; for to live...but it's not my case
Catalina,
ReplyDeleteExcept for a few mistakes, the first two paragraphs of your post are Okey, but the last one is not clear at all, I’m afraid it needs some editing. Could you do something about it?
Please check the things in parentheses.
My favourite piece of technology is my laptop. (SUBJECT MISSING)( Is the only thing that I really need.
My father gave it to me one month after I entered to the university and I use it every day, many hours per day because it's really necessary for me, (for to do: OBSOLETE ENGLISH, SEE NOTES IN PREVIOUS POST) all of my (works: INCORRECT WORD) and also (for to) relax in my times of leisure when I use the Msn Messenger program, visit Facebook and other websites of my interest.
Everyday after I arrive (to: INCORRECT PREPOSITION.) my house I turn (off: DO YOU MEAN ‘ON’?) the computer and first/THE FIRST THING I DO IS chek MY e- mail and just after that I can do my (works: WRONG WORD) and the other things .
I 'm sure that we can live without (this kinds) of things although a laptop or (other type) of computers are very important tools for almost ANY type of work( ).
Today we can't imagine a world working without this PIECE OF TECHNOLOGY, but that is because now we are absolutely dependent (of: CHECK PREPOSITION) (this things) (for to(*)SEE LETTER d BELOW) work (and for some people; for to live...but it's not my case: THIS IS CONFUSING)
a) compare: get to / arrive at
b) review: this / these.
c) compare: another book / other books / the other book / the other books
d) If you talk about the purpose of devices, use: I use it ‘for’ or use it ‘to’.
Ex.
I use this machine for cutting paper, or, I use this machine to cut paper.
The laptop is very necessary to me too.
ReplyDeleteI'm a fan of laptop
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